Draft - Handed in!

After editing and completing our draft weve learnt what works and looks effective and what doesn't. Receiving feedback from Mr Smith and Mr Ford will help us to evaluate our first draft and work out how to improve it. Already i can see what needs improving. Firstly i was very happy with the lip syncing Liv did, however i feel there could have been more emotion put into it! As we are doing a sad song this gives us an option to communicate with the audience. If Liv was to put more emotion into the singing, for example looking away from the camera, and into it again creates tention and will have an effect on the audience. It will make them feel the sad and upset feeling that the character is showing. Also i think we could add more detail into the video. The simple idea that we are using is good, although little things within it, for example the make up could be altered. At the moment we are using very big and bold stage make-up but theres no reasoning behind using that style of make-up. So therefore changing the make-up to a more subtle style would look more effective and relate to the scenery and location etc. Over all, both me and the other girls are very pleased with our first draft, but feel we could improve it to achieve a higher grade.