Evaluating Our First Draft- Narrative

Today we discussed as a group the improvements we can make when we film the final draft. By watching back our first draft, we have decided between us, and with the opinion of others, that there needs to be more of a narrative to our music video. The reason for this is that it is not evident to why the character is at one point without makeup and the next shot she is wearing full makeup and is crying, wiping the makeup off. There seems to be no apparent link between the different shots and therefore we need more of a story.

As the song is about a relationship between two individuals, we thought it would be a good idea to show the character emotional to mirror the feelings of the character and to link in with the words. We feel we have not given the audience enough of a narrative for them to understand clearly why the character is upset and why she is crying. We considered having flashbacks incorporated into the video to make it more interesting and appealing to watch and to add variety to the simple camera shots we have used. In order to do this we will have to consider whether we want to create flashbacks or do we want another alternative to this to show a development of narrative as the video progresses. As the shots we have used for the without makeup face and the full made up face are simple, we want to make the video slightly more amusing to watch although we do like the simple aspect to it as we think it looks sophisticated.

After a lot of discussion we have also decided that we might not use as much makeup as we have, and may slightly lower the amount we use to make the video more realistic. As we were inspired by Natasha Bedingfield's video of "I Bruise Easily", we have understand the context and realized that although she does have a lot of makeup on which we were inspired by, she is in Japan in the video and is playing the part of a Geisha so therefore it is not seen as unusual for her to dress up in this manner, whereas for us, the makeup can look slightly dramatic for our surroundings.

We have a lot more to discuss before the final draft but by communicating as a group and by asking others for feedback we have a good set of ideas and a lot to work from.